Fiction Scribe

Did we really need this? Truly? (If you’re not the type of person to follow links, it’s a list of ‘other words for ‘said’’.)

Since when did the perfectly adequate ‘said’ become such a sin to use? Oh, wait, that’s right!

When some writers thought you needed to tag every single line of dialogue in an entire story.

I’m okay with occasional ‘he whispered’ and such, but this list just makes me shake my head. When you consider that half the times some writers use ‘said’ it’s unnecessary, lists like those are doubly unnecessary.

Let’s take ‘began’ for example.

“Well, the thing is…” he began.

Have you ever heard the rule ‘show, don’t tell’? Well, this is telling. And then telling again. Of course that’s how he began because he’s – go figure – beginning his sentence.

Impressive, I know, but I pick up on things like that.

How about ‘explained’?

“The battery goes in like this,” he explained.

Again, obviously. Why don’t you save yourself some time and keep your readers from snoring by writing something like:

“The battery goes in like this.” He inserted the battery into the toy slowly so young Dora could understand.

Not only are most (if not all) words on that list similarly obvious like that, they’re also annoying. You don’t need them.

Use ‘said’ when you need to. ‘Said’ loves you. ‘Said’ has never abandoned you for fancier and ultimately more annoying writers, so why do you feel the need to abandon ‘said’?

A note to anyone I edit or will edit for: Don’t even look at that list. Save me the editing time. Please.

Save me more time by checking out my other pet peeves.

Many of us, including myself, sometimes seem born to ramble. But when you’re writing, why waste twelve words on something you could have said in six?

Perhaps this isn’t the best pet peeve to mention before NaNo (Padding 101), but waiting until later to mention it isn’t going to make it any less annoying.

An example of what I’m talking about:

Word Wasting: He walked past the rather old and run down establishment and his face showed something akin to satisfaction as he took possession of another traveler’s wallet.

Being Specific: He smirked as he took the young man’s wallet.

Mention the building if you must, but there are still many more direct ways of saying what you want to say.

Be direct. Be specific.

You’ll keep your readers and stop sounding like you’re trying to publish your NaNo without editing.

Do we really need to discuss this?

Apparently some of us do.

Tenses in writing determine what words you use when you are writing. It decides whether you say:

“I finished with my work.”
“I finish with my work.”
Or
“I will finish with my work.”

To make things simple, let’s not talk about future tense. An entire book written in future tense would be annoying.

It’s perfectly acceptable (if you do it well) to switch tenses from one in one scene to another in the next. Or to even do it mid-scene if you have a present tense work and write in a flash back.

However, one thing you don’t do is switch tense in mid-sentence! How can you expect anyone to read like that when you’ve put:

I am being tricked, but it was all okay. He likes me.

“I’m okay,” I said. I feel like I am floating right now, even though he was also making me a bit angry.

Don’t do that. It’s annoying. Stay in the same tense, at least while you’re still within one sentence. And proof read!

By the way, the above should have been (for past tense) something like:

I was being tricked, but it was all okay. He liked me.

“I’m okay,” I said. I felt like I was floating right then, even though he was also making me a bit angry.

Don’t ask about the title. Put it up to the flu now having taken over my brain.

Talk about basics. You’d think the whole ‘s’ versus ‘’s’ would be a natural thing. Well, perhaps not natural, but at least well known. But apparently it’s not, even in the adult world where a coffee shop can’t even have marshmallow spelled correctly on their menu.

A big pet peeve of mine is people using the apostrophe ‘s’ wrong or leaving out an apostrophe when it’s necessary. Some (incorrect) examples:

The art teacher thinks Bills artwork is quite unique.
The horse’s are wandering around in the paddock.

In case you need reminding, the apostrophe ‘s’ is to show a possessive singular noun. Bill’s unique artwork, Nina’s big farm, the horse’s paddock (if it’s a singular horse).

If you’re confused about plural nouns, then:

The horses’ paddock.
The twins’ play room.
The farmers’ unions.

The same goes for singulars like names that end in ‘s’.

Jesus’ tequila slammer.
Ross’ camping gear.
Peruvians’ sense of history.

One of the more annoying features of this pet peeve, however, is the whole its vs it’s thing that is entirely too simple a concept for the amount of people who mix them up. Typos, I understand, but otherwise, no.

It’s simple.

It’s = it is. If you can replace what you’ve written with ‘it is’ then ‘it’s’ is correct.

Its = is a possessive, like what I talked about above:

The story had a life of its own.
The dog scratched its ears happily.

(This was on the radio, but the woman was reading the headlines, so I say I still get to put it in my list of writing-related pet peeves.)

Coming home from a road trip with Mr. Scribe, we heard a news reporter on the radio say this:

“We are currently looking for people who left before they arrived.”

(People leaving before they’ve arrived? Now that’s something I’d like to see.)

What she should have said was, “We are currently looking for people who left before the ambulances arrived.” However, the ambulance drivers had been mentioned in previous sentence so she took for granted the listeners would know who ‘they’ are.

We did, but that doesn’t make for good writing.

Say what you mean to say clearly.

I’ve mentioned double meanings in the past, but I think this point needs to be mentioned again because of the more subtle double meaning. (The example I used was “Please submit a list of all employees broken down by sex” which is definitely a bit more obvious.)

This one is a bit tough and something I have also grumbled over.

“He glared at Adam until he sat down” may seem perfectly fine in context and/or in your mind, but who is doing the sitting? He or Adam? That’s the problem. Unfortunately, you can’t always reword things so you don’t double up on using a name. “He glared at Adam until Adam sat down” is the (simple) way to go with that one (unless you want to completely change it to something else).

You have to love language. Even if it is tough sometimes, pay attention to what you say. It’ll likely come through in what you write.

“I could care less.”

Oh? You could? And here I was thinking you didn’t care at all. It’s good to know there is a possibility of you caring less and thus meaning you do care at least somewhat for what we’re talking about.

I believe the correct phrase, and what you meant, is: “I couldn’t care less.”

Just because they are my pet peeves doesn’t mean they can’t amuse me.

While, technically, this kind of statement is contextual and could work when it’s in the correct place, I have never once heard someone say, “I could care less” and mean it that way. What they are really going for is “I couldn’t care less”.

Am I the only one who laughs at people who act snooty and snarky and then go on to say something like, “I could care less”? Whenever someone says that to me, I very seriously and say, “That’s good to know, but I’m more concerned about you caring a bit more, not less.”

I am probably the only one who finds this funny, but that’s okay.

Honestly, I think it’s all a matter of herd mentality. The whole “LOL” thing, saying things – like irregardless – that are wrong or overdone can all probably be blamed on herd mentality. We pick up traits from the people we like, our family, and the media.

I can imagine someone standing up at this point and saying, “I could care less.”

(Please tell me someone out there is amused by this could/couldn’t care less thing as I am.)

Bottom line: Think about what you’re saying and what it truly means.

How does this happen? Why do we feel the need to make up words that mean exactly the same thing as other words?

Irregardless = Regardless

Regardless = Irregardless

Why do we need them both? Why do people insist on saying “irregardless”?

I have no idea. I’m busy. We’re all busy. The last thing we need is people making up words that are the same as other words simply to sound different from everyone else?

Well, for those of you who didn’t know - just say ‘regardless’. That’s all you need and all you’ve ever needed.

Bah.

omwtfbbq!!1! ur up n my chtng?!?111?!

Ahem.

AAAAAAAAAAAHHHHHHHHHHHH!!!!!!!

Yes, doing that broke at least three of my pet peeves, but sometimes a person has to do what’s necessary.

Everyone is in a hurry, but that gives you no right to inflict your primarily vowel-less, over-punctuated, I USE CAPITALS BECAUSE THEY’RE LOUD, dirty spanking of the English language on me.

Honestly, I’m guilty of a little bit of it too, but I was never like the above, and I had a specific reason other than pure laziness to do it. I also succumb to the occasional “LOL”, but that’s pure mimicry of people I chat with a lot.

And those are still not good enough excuses.

If you insist on not kicking your habit of over-punctuation when writing posts/emails/etc, don’t care to be consistent in all you do, and basically don’t respect other people enough to take those extra milliseconds to type out full words, then guess what…

I am in no way going to read your work.

If you ask me to read your work with “plz rd my stffz” instead of “please read my work” then tough luck to you because I won’t. You obviously don’t respect me or your other readers outside your work, so I don’t care about what’s going on in your work.

It’s as simple as that.

Yes, my friends, the time has come. We shall bravely venture into the confusing world of “lay vs. lie”.

Does this whole thing piss anyone else off as much as it does me? I mean, come on! Have one present tense for everything and one past tense for everything. Easy. I’ll even promise not to rant about lie also meaning something false. See? I’m willing to compromise.

Yuck.

So what is the final word on this little lovely? Well, I’d better get it right or else I’ll have a slew of emails along with a long and drawn out feeling of embarrassment to deal with.

“Lay” is a verb meaning ‘to put or place something somewhere’. Thus, you need an object to make it work.

Example: I lay the pillow on the bed gently, while I laid the blanket on the bed roughly. I’m now considering laying a few more blankets on the bed.

“Lie” is a verb meaning to recline. No object needed.

Example: I lie on the bed often, thinking of my fate. My husband asks my why I’m lying there when I’ve lain there for over an hour. I lay there and stare at him.

Ah ha! Brain pain - ‘lay’ works for both of them! Yes, that’s true, but always think of it in terms of an object. Is there an object involved or not?

If you’re not sure whether to use “lay” or “lie,” try substituting a form of the verb “place.” If it makes sense, use a form of “lay.”

Example: I lay the pillow on the bed gently. I place the pillow on the bed gently.

See? Not so horrible after all.

But you might want to bookmark this post anyway.

Yeah, I said weenies. Because that’s what they are! Weenies, the lot of them.

Who am I talking about? The people who can’t take criticism.

I don’t care if your mom can bake the best apple pie in three counties and thinks your writing is about as perfect as the locally made maple syrup. I don’t care if Uncle Bob said he spent a whole extra hour on the toilet because he ‘just couldn’t put that book down’.

Well, I do care if they own a publishing company and have at least four years editing experience.

Otherwise, no.

Part of living in the writing sector of the world is developing a ‘tough skin’. The tough skin is not to deflect ‘the evil criticism bugs’ by any means; you develop it so you can take criticism and apply it instead of sobbing into your manuscript because you were so busy writing that you forgot to go out and buy some tissues.

Criticism shouldn’t be this thing some people are simply unable to handle or hear. Criticism is not only not about whether you are a worthy human being, it’s not something that will kill you.

Writers who can’t take criticism: The comments people (other than your mom and Uncle Bob) make about your work is that - about your work. If someone makes a comment you don’t like, either a. fix it, b. keep it fresh in your mind when you rewrite, or (very rarely) c. dismiss the comment for now. Option C is rarely used and only usually comes into play when someone (usually on a writing forum) says something to the effect of, “You’re an idiot. Never write again.”

Bottom line? People are talking about your work, not you. You didn’t know how to do proofs in geometry right away and neither do you know the power of ‘insta-novel’. Take criticism. Use criticism.

It could just help you get published.

It looks like Harry Potter.

“But it’s not,” you say.

The characters are like Harry Potter characters.

“It’s not Harry Potter, though,” you insisted. “They can’t do magic.”

Uh huh.

You might as well face it love, either call it fan fiction and get over it, or give up on the idea. I don’t care if you are borrowing a character, a plot line, a setting, or a hair off Harry’s head, if you do that, you are writing fan fiction.

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This pet peeve is somewhat like the first post about wannabes, but these are wannabes of a more general sort…

In a roundabout way, Bob’s guest post reminded me of a long-standing pet peeve of mine, something I touched on in the recent Bird by Bird discussion:

She goes on to touch on something I feel is very important:

“The problem that comes up over and over is that these people want to be published. They kind of want to write, but they really want to be published.�

And that’s the key, isn’t it? I believe too many people focus on just getting published. People assume because you know how to write, anyone can write a book. I encourage those people to think of it this way: Just because I know how to hold a paint brush and put paint on a canvas doesn’t mean I can create a wonderful work of art.

I got it a lot in high school, but I didn’t truly consider myself a writer. So when some of my friends assumed because I could write a story, they could, I didn’t say anything. But high school is over now, and yet people still don’t seem to understand…

My pet peeve is people who think that just because they can write some letters, just because they’ve read a few book, they assume they can write the next Harry Potter. The truth is, these people who suddenly decide they are the next best seller are usually a.) writing fanfiction of Harry Potter and b.) the ones who have no drive to see it through.

There are people who have natural talent, yes, but not that many.

It’s the non-natural talent types who don’t regard story writing like the art it is who make me mad. You didn’t just sit down and play beautiful music on the piano because you know you can make noise by pressing keys. Neither did you make beautiful pottery and statues because you know how to squish things in your hand.

Writing is an art. You start by learning letters and by reading. You improve by studying the rules and play with them. You go through trial and error, and (hopefully) you improve over time.

It takes work. Work.

So for all those out there who think you can sit down and craft the story of a lifetime, you’d better be prepared to spend your lifetime writing better drafts.

After going through a lot of fantastic entries, I picked the one that kept me coming back for more reads and got me smiling every time I read it.

Congratulations to Jennifer Shirk for her pet peeve post on bad editing! She will receive a $25 amazon.com gift certificate along with her post as Fiction Scribe’s Pet Peeve #32.

Thank you to everyone who participated.

Bad editing:

I picked up a book a few months ago that sounded cute. I started reading it and had formed a mental picture of what the heroine looked like.

You with me so far? Good. Because then something happened.

She changed hair color.

Yes. She changed hair color about 1/2 to 3/4 of the way through the book. And I don’t mean “she went to the beauty salon for a new look� changed hair color.

No. All of a sudden she was a blonde. Poof. Just like that.

So I had to go back to the first chapter and double check my mistake. Surely I must have just thought she was a brunette. But no. There it was. The hero thinking to himself what a pretty brunette she was.

Ah-ha! So it wasn’t me. Someone had made a booboo.

Grrr.

Yes, the contest is still going! I’ll be giving away a $20 amazon gift certificate to the lovely person who sends me the best pet peeve.

The rules are:

*Entries must be sent via the “contact me� button on the right (unless you know my email address, then you can send it via email)
*Entries must be in by August 10th at midnight Australia time. There are a lot of world clocks on the internet. Find one and figure out your deadline where you are.
*The winner will be announced on Tuesday the 14th and must be willing to send me their email address and links to your sites/blogs (preferably with the submission to save time), and the winning entry will be featured on that post as that week’s Pet Peeve.
*You cannot use any Pet Peeves I have listed in the past. Look at the category to double check.
*The pet peeve MUST be related to writing in some way.
*This contest is open to everyone, though preference will be given to non-451 submissions in the event of a tie.
*The judges will be me and my husband. Be warned, he’s almost as picky as I am when it comes to writing, so bad spelling/grammar/etc on your submission could be grounds for disqualification.

Enjoy!

At some point next month, I’m having a birthday. I’m a bit apathetic when it comes to the day, but any excuse for a contest, right?

Yes, a contest. I’ll be giving away a $20 amazon gift certificate to the lovely person who sends me the best pet peeve.

The rules are:

*Entries must be sent via the “contact me” button on the right (unless you know my email address, then you can send it via email)
*Entries must be in by August 10th at midnight Australia time. There are a lot of world clocks on the internet. Find one and figure out your deadline where you are.
*The winner will be announced on Tuesday the 14th and must be willing to send me their email address and links to your sites/blogs (preferably with the submission to save time), and the winning entry will be featured on that post as that week’s Pet Peeve.
*You cannot use any Pet Peeves I have listed in the past. Look at the category to double check.
*The pet peeve MUST be related to writing in some way.
*This contest is open to everyone, though preference will be given to non-451 submissions in the event of a tie.
*The judges will be me and my husband. Be warned, he’s almost as picky as I am when it comes to writing, so bad spelling/grammar/etc on your submission could be grounds for disqualification.

Enjoy!